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I R R E L A T I V I T Y by *nihilim:iconnihilim:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Nature > Open




Skipping silently a-
long lips of film,
(water's never far beneath,) the
obsidian-rock-tear tears through
the air, denying echo cushion
of sound
vibrate.

Dissipating significance of audit sensory
auditory neurons, neutralizing digital self-explanation,

conclusion:
irrelativity.

Time slows
to a flash
of not-so-aerodynamic time,
sewing knots in reason that's
never far behind.

Splash.
©2003-2009 *nihilim
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~psychodrive Oct 23, 2003, 7:33:09 PM
Dissipating significance of audit sensory
auditory neurons, neutralizing digital self-explanation,

my favourite bit. the concept that what we percieve of the world is actually only the rslut of the manner in which our brain interprets the original data. very intereseting subject. actually, i wrote an essay about 3 years ago on a similar topic. might go see if i can find it.

will return later for more reading. perhaps then i will see something i miss at this point in time.

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<youthculture>AAHJ THERESN A FLY ON MY NONUEIET
<youthculture>MONITERN AAAA
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~k423n Oct 23, 2003, 9:37:41 PM
bravo..

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you can get down but you cant be afraid.
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~patter Oct 24, 2003, 3:24:21 AM
Good word play as ever but a bit dispassionate for me.
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~infaredfog Oct 24, 2003, 6:32:35 AM
Wow. That's awesome, but correct me if I'm wrong, is this about throwing a rock into water? Or even maybe skipping a rock along water?

It's got me all confused. =) But that's a good thing.

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~pathetical Oct 24, 2003, 6:42:22 AM
I like this in an indefinable way, which is weird because I don't normally like 'clever' poetry. Time really does slow, almost to a halt, in the middle of the poem, and the ending comes as a bit of a shock. The only line I don't like is 'never far behind', or rather, the way it links into the line before it. and I couldn't say for sure why.

Well done.

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I'm a girl, dammit.
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~carissima82 Oct 24, 2003, 8:15:08 AM
damn-it.
i had a whole nice review thing and the internet ATE IT.

anyway, in short summary, the second stanza is lovely, the last full one is conclusive but not obvious, i don't overly care for "splash", but the rythmic and abstract qualities of the work make up for that. it's definitely right up my alley. lovely job, as per usual.

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when she walked, her knees cracked like a pick-up truck driving full-force over a deer carcass.
~stupidvagina
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~chode-09 Oct 24, 2003, 4:11:03 PM
The second verse is outstanding, the whole poem is great but is splash really relevent?
nice work anyhoo...
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*nihilim Oct 24, 2003, 5:51:40 PM
Yeah, I wrote this out of guilt of not writing. If it seemed dispassionate, it's probably because I was.

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-i: a.i,=n_
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*nihilim Oct 24, 2003, 5:53:03 PM
I'll never tell!

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